Comments on: Avoidance

By: Dave

Dave — Tue, 25 Dec 2007 00:22:29 +0000

So it invokes an emotion in you… then the poetry has done it’s job

My English teacher was very insistant that poetry didn’t have to be pretty, but then she probably wasn’t very good at it.

By: B

Fri, 21 Dec 2007 13:27:12 +0000

If “the hard rain pelts against the window with an increased urgency” is poetic, Dave, then I despair…

By: Andy

Andy — Fri, 23 Nov 2007 10:19:16 +0000

It wasn’t going to be a post in the first place, but I thought after going to all that trouble I may as well do something with it.

Damn you for making me read your comment, that was devious. But it’s hardly comparable in either length, or atmosphere. Where’s the chattering teeth? The thin film of frost, sparklingly backlit by your TFT? The shivering rats?

It’s nice and cosy in my office. I hope this knowledge helps you feel better.

By: Dave

Dave — Fri, 23 Nov 2007 10:07:55 +0000

Ah… I thought you were actually doing some work up there. I find the style of this post quite interesting. You start off rambling and then try to get some nice atmospheric prose into the mix. You should probably have run it against a grammar and spell checker first though. And I’m not sure “rain pelts against the windows harder” is the nicest way to phrase that… I’d have gone with “rain pelts harder against the windows”. Alternatively you could have been much more poetic like “the hard rain pelts against the window with an increased urgency” thus implying that rain has some sort of motive.

In case you haven’t figured it out by now, I’m trying to write a comment which is at least a comparable length to your post. I feel that if you get to waste so much of my time by making me read through that, then the least I get to do is to waste some of yours by making you read my comment. Either way, it seems a better use of my time doing this then what I’m currently being paid to do while freezing my fingers off because the silly building manager of my office is too incompetent to actually get the heating fixed. We told him it was broken in February… they couldn’t fix it then because they needed the heating to be off… so they get most of the way through summer and then decide it can’t be fixed till it comes back on again. Now it has become a “Big Job” and thus will take months.

OK, I think that’s enough — except to ask whether anyone was impressed by the 42 word sentence in the above paragraph which manages a whole 40 of those without a comma?